This writing has fantastic personal voice Aroha. I love the small statements that add so much humour and feeling. There are little touches everywhere that make this a pleasure to read, onomatopoeia, repetition, similes... Remember to check for tense and spelling to make this fabulous writing perfect. James
Well done Aroha! You are really developing as a writer - I am super proud of you. You have a good understanding of using the right word or phrase at the right time.
Where to from here? I will talk with you using the assessment sheet I sent you ok?
This writing has fantastic personal voice Aroha. I love the small statements that add so much humour and feeling. There are little touches everywhere that make this a pleasure to read, onomatopoeia, repetition, similes... Remember to check for tense and spelling to make this fabulous writing perfect.
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Well done Aroha! You are really developing as a writer - I am super proud of you. You have a good understanding of using the right word or phrase at the right time.
ReplyDeleteWhere to from here?
I will talk with you using the assessment sheet I sent you ok?