Thursday, 28 August 2014
The Learning Pit
Wednesday, 27 August 2014
Our Time To Shine
Butterfly's ( nerve wreaking side ) or the fighters ( the confident no butterfly side. ) who's gonna win. Oh butterfly's are down fighters are up oh no fighters are down. Butterfly's win. The point of this fight is that I was super duper nervous.
We scurry on stage. Our jam plays. We haven't even gotten to our destination ( the stage.) I am so confused. Jade jiggles her head to troy. Hesitating him. Trying to tell him to stop. Nothing. She jiggles her head again. He stops the music. Then plays it again. I am flooded in sweat right now. Even though I am hotter then egypt we carried on with the dance, got every move correct and I was like a steam room.
use a range of challenging verbs: Orange
- use the hot words: boiling, sizzling, searing etc.,: Green
select one or two similes: Green
select one or two metaphors or personification: Green
use onomatopoeia to show sounds: Orange
select words that start with the same sound (alliteration): Red
We had to use (See, Hear, Smell, Feel, Taste, Think, Do, Feel, Say) in parts of our story so for see you had to put so etching that you saw and you had to do that for all of the other words.
BUDDY COMMENT: I think you did well at your detail and your boiling hot words but I think you should improve on your main idea like your dance because your are not really putting that much into your story!!!
Buy Your BFF Jade
Comment: I think I was good at using a range of hot words. Mabey next time I could foucuss on using alliteration
Thursday, 14 August 2014
Te Reo Maori Poster
Wednesday, 2 July 2014
Goals Term 3
Wednesday, 25 June 2014
Grass Hopper Tennis
Wednesday, 18 June 2014
Integrity Movie
Tuesday, 17 June 2014
Writing
I can...
my comment: I think that my writing is good, Mabey if I had a bit more time I would be more relaxed on having to include hooking words.
buddy comment:Aroha, You were very on task because you never were talking you were always looking down doing your work. As a result you writing it awesome so well done!!! Georgia O :)
teacher comment:
state the main point in the first part of a each new paragraph:
*There are three states of matter
* Atoms are every where
*Potential energy is stored energy
* Konetic energy if moving energy
* Heat and Temperature are NOT the same
You have used a main point at the start of each body paragraph.
Mabey 7/10
include evidence (facts, experiments etc) to support my main point
I could work on that, that could be my goal for writing
Most paragraphs have clear examples.
Most of them do
explain the evidence and how it proves my main point
That could be another goal I could work on
You have persevered to try to explain how/why your example proves your point - this is really tricky, well done.
Practise writing a linking sentence to my next paragraph
Your ideas link in your paragraphs. Have a look at how writers link between paragraphs. You have started to do this.
infuse style: topic-specifc vocab, second/third person, present tense, transition words
Great style. You have used some transition words.





